Trying to perfect my paper. Hour 13-16

With my Teacher draft of the essay being due in two days, it was crucial for me to start trying to perfect my paper with the feedback i had received from the peer edit as well as from my own thoughts. Typing up the paper obviously wasn't a brisk walk in the park. i noticed that in my first draft, i had a ton of run on sentences. If i wanted to make this as good a paper as i can, i needed to fix any errors and all errors i had. Now that i am sure of my topic, technology replacing humans in the workforce, it was much easier to pinpoint my research and make some minor adjustments. Although my paper was mostly based off of Jeremy Rifkin's article "New Technology and the End of Jobs", i found really strong arguments in an article by Alan Brown titled "Automation vs. Jobs". In this article, MIT two MIT Professors expressed their feelings towards the advancements of technology and how it directly affects the work force. This was a great find for me since it is directly related to my paper topic and argument. If i wasn't already lucky enough, i was able to find an article by a man named Henrik I. Christensen who directly responded to the thoughts and arguments of the two MIT professors. With these two articles, i am now able to compare and contrast the two sides of this argument, making it much more clear and accurate. Hopefully this teacher draft is as good as i hoped it to be. I tried my best to not procrastinate on the essay portion as i feel that this is the most important part of the whole project.